- Group 1: Mads, Ellie, Luis, Roy, Bella
- Group 2: Sara, Carly, Claire, Jaylen, Lauren
- Group 3: Isaiah, Louis, Kevin, Eldina
- Summarize the meaning of the term “schizophonic mimesis,” as Feld uses it. Make sure to use sufficient quotes from the text and examples to support your summary. (Please note: although we have already discussed this term in class, your draft must draw from the text itself. Drafts that only summarize our class discussion will not receive credit!)
- Write an introduction to your summary in which you imagine why knowing about “schizophonic mimesis” might be of interest to a reader who is a non-expert interested in ethnomusicology. What would your reader gain by reading about the term? What claim might you be able to make about the term’s value or use (in conceptual or practical terms)?
Your draft should be no more than 750 words. Please do not go over this limit! As always, make sure to cite sources properly. Your draft is due on Moodle no later than 12pm (noon) on Tuesday, February 21 (note different day), and will be critiqued in class on Wednesday, February 22.
For your more in-depth critique, you should address the following:
- Look at the introduction paragraph. Search for any sentences that point to a problem (a gap in knowledge, something misunderstood, an unstable situation somewhere in the world, etc.). Underline the sentence(s) that state the problem. Then, in the margins of the paper (or at the end of the paper) rewrite the problem in a form of a question that you think the author is posing.
- Find the sentence in which the author states an answer to the question. (We can call this sentence the “thesis” or the “claim” of the paper.) Evaluate whether that sentence is an appropriate answer to the question you wrote in part 1 of this critique. (You can use thematic analysis to see if question and answer use the same terms; you can also think about whether the claim seems reasonable based on the scope of the question.) Suggest revisions as appropriate.
- Evaluate whether the question/answer pair you have identified in parts 1 and 2 are appropriate to the stated reader (someone “who is a non-expert interested in ethnomusicology”). Why or why not? How can the writer revise the problem and solution to make them seem more valuable or relevant to the reader?
Remember to either bring two hard copies of your critique to class, or to email your critique to me and to the author by the time class begins.
- Revise your introduction so that it constructs a problem and makes a claim. (The nature of your claim will be partly dependent on the revisions you make to the body of the paper, so make sure to see the second point before beginning your work!) For this draft, you are invited—but not required—to think of a new reader for your paper, and target your introduction to that reader. The reader can be any group you like—an academic field, the readership of a particular publication—but it should be an intellectually motivated reader, someone who would be willing to read a couple pages on schizophonic mimesis. Therefore, you might think of yourself as writing for a sociologist, or writing a long-form piece for a publication like the London Review of Books, but not for a venue like Buzzfeed or Time. Whether you devise a new reader or not, in your revised introduction, make sure that you include an instability (what the reader believes and what condition might undermine that belief), consequences (what are the stakes of the problem, or what benefit might arise from your claim), and a claim.
- Revise the body of your paper so that it includes new evidence from either Neuman’s “Becoming a Musician” or Hirschkind’s “Hearing Modernity.” You should think of the body of your paper as serving two functions: first, explaining the meaning of “schizophonic mimesis”; and second, applying it to one or more specific examples. (These functions can be interrelated and need not necessarily be fully separated in the body of the paper—but they must both take place within the paper.)
Your new draft should be a bit longer than your previous one—about 3 pages or so. Submit it on Moodle no later than 12pm (noon) on Tuesday, February 28.
As always, you should read the papers of everyone in your group. You should also prepare a detailed critique of the paper belonging to the person before/above you in the group’s alphabetic list.
Your task in this critique is, essentially, the same as in the first critique. Look at the introduction and assess the level of motivation it will give to whatever reader is being targeted. Is there a problem constructed? How do you know? (What words and structures indicate that there is a problem?) Is the instability valuable and realistic? Are the consequences valuable and realistic? Is there some sort of claim that will indicate what the rest of the paper will be about?
Once you have assessed the introduction and suggested revisions, you can also look at the rest of the paper, paying attention to the relevance of textual evidence (quotes) and the degree to which the writer has fulfilled expectations created in the introduction. In particular, think about whether the claim/thesis in the introduction is clearly connected to the body of the paper. Are there keywords in the thesis that occur in the rest of the argument? If not, do you think there are any that can be added?
- Reader: Keep your target reader the same as before—an educated or scholarly reader who is not a specialist in ethnomusicology, but who nonetheless has an interest in the field. The reason I want you to keep it the same is that I think there is more work to do on assessing what this reader knows and values.
- Texts: You have the option of rewriting your draft to use the text that is assigned for March 13 or 15 (Lausevic, “Why Balkan?” and Floyd, “Signifyin(g)”). You must continue to write about the Feld chapter and the concept of “schizophonic mimesis”; however, if you think it would help you to make a better argument, you may use the Lausevic or Floyd chapter instead of Neuman or Hirschkind.
- Introduction: You must substantially revise your introduction. Although it was not explicitly required in the last draft, you must now include an instability, consequences, and a thesis. This means that you need to think about what your reader cares about, what your reader knows, and what sorts of instabilities and consequences will be motivating. Don’t just point at something that you think is unstable; explain why it is unstable. Keep in mind that your reader probably cares substantially about conceptual consequences—such as the intellectual benefits of putting texts in conversation. Your thesis must be specific, and it must use themes that will structure your argument throughout the rest of the paper.
- Textual evidence: Because your paper is about an interaction of two texts, you must make them interact somewhere in your paper. This does not mean that they need to interact in every paragraph; but conversely, you also should not simply divide the body of your paper into two halves in which you analyze one then the other text.
Your third draft should be at least 3 pages. (You will not get credit for a shorter paper: you cannot accomplish what you are asked to accomplish in less than 3 pages.) It should be submitted on Moodle no later than 12pm (noon) on Sunday, March 19.
For your critique, you should continue to focus on the structure of the paper’s introduction:
- Is there a clear instability? Is the instability relevant or valuable to the target reader? Identify the instability, be able to explain how it is structured, and suggest any necessary revisions.
- Does the writer incorporate both texts into the introduction?
- Are there consequences in the introduction? Are those consequences realistic and valuable to the target reader?
- Is there a clear claim/thesis stated in the introduction? Does the thesis use specific terms/key words?
You should also think about how the introduction fits the rest of the paper. Are there expectations created by the introduction that are not fulfilled by the paper—or vice versa? Does the thesis control what happens in the rest of the paper? Does the author create a strong conversation between the two texts, or are they mostly treated separately? In other words, your critique should evaluate the introduction, but you should also keep in mind that the introduction has implications for the success of the rest of the paper!
Your group is only required to come to class once during this week. The schedule will be:
- Group 1: Monday (March 20) in class
- Group 2: Wednesday (March 22) in class
- Group 3: Friday (March 24) in class